Tapping to the rhythm of pop,
squinting against the glaring sun.
Vast greens line the left,
tall greens cover the right.
Swaying gently in the wind,
rice plants hold a similar rapport,
waving goodbye to the sun,
holding onto the unspoken agreement.,
tomorrow at the same time.
Together again,
a team they stand united,
they will once again brave a brand new day.
Submitting this piece for Thursday Poets Rally Week 51
partnering is a brand new road that together makes it beautiful
cool write!
My entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/09/07/eks-and-the-bed-of-roses/
Great poem, love the last stanza.
Here is my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/09/scribbles.html
brave a brand new day is great ending line.
thanks for sharing.
original naturistical write ironisch! my entry.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2011/01/30/lines/
I love your end about braving a brand new day thanks for sharing
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/08/the-crimson-witch/
Yes, I was hoping the way back will inspire reflections and hope for a new beginning. Glad it’s injected hope:D
up lifting spirits is appreciated, superb entry.
it signifies friends right? its very nice!
My idea was more of team work. But looking at it,friendship does seem to apply here too. Thanks for coming by:)
Hello.
Lovely sentiments, especially the ending.
Thanks for sharing.
Under Blinking Stars
Thanks, it was to signify hope and a new beginning:)
I liked it.
This was my favorite part
“waving goodbye to the sun,
holding onto the unspoken agreement.,
tomorrow at the same time”
Nice job
Very clever use of the rice and sun metaphor, really strong imagery. Great choice of words.
The Lonely Recluse.
Thanks,it was challenging with this as halfway I lost my inspiration and didn’t know how to end but somehow I managed to find a way. Glad you enjoyed it:)
Oh, I hate it when the inspiration leaves, I’ve learnt to just leave the piece a day or so and come back, and keep doing that till the poem is complete. It took me about four days to write the piece I just finished. Glad you could finish it though.
The Lonely Recluse.